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Thank you for looking over this chapter and letting me know what has been working so far and what needs to be revised and edited so that it flows better, following from breaking up sections to expanding them to make the story fully understandable.

Thanks for letting me know that the rewrite is flowing better than the previous version. Additionally, thanks for letting me know I need to trim some of the "girly bra stuff" while keeping the banter between them. Adjust the details of the clothing change in Califia's room and show more of Chilonis's... Ver más

thank you for looking over this chapter and let me know that it flows well but it needs a little work in fixing name pronunciation and name spellings throughout the work but that's an easy fix to take care of but thank you for taking your time out to doing this and thank you for your time thank you

thank you for letting me know how the chapter is flowing and give me an update that it feels a little bit unfinished. I will remedy this problem in the current version and help optimize it for future reading. thank you

thank you for letting me know what's been working so far on this book and what actually important in the story. thank you